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hidden_passagesTitle: Of Wings Shining in Darkness (Chapter 13) - A winter love story. Part 5 in my "Demimonde of Shadows" series.
Author: earthspirits
Fandoms: Penny Dreadful and Granada Sherlock Holmes.
Characters: Ethan Chandler, Vanessa Ives, John Clare, Victor Frankenstein, Sir Malcolm Murray, Kaetenay, Dracula, Dr. John H. Watson, Sherlock Holmes
Spoilers: Contains S3 spoilers.
Rating / Warnings: Mature - For 18+ only. This chapter contains violence, gore and death (some graphic) + a bit of strong language, as well as attempted forced vampirism. Some of this may possibly be triggering.
Summary: Dracula - confident of impending victory - drags Vanessa Ives into a terrifying psychic vision.
Posted at A03: archiveofourown.org/works/7413997/chapters/40956461
PLEASE NOTE: SPOILERS to this chapter in the comments section!
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Date: 2019-02-15 05:27 pm (UTC)"The wind caught at his coat, swirling it backwards" -- ah, film visuals :-D
I hadn't noticed (not being familiar enough with the cast, I'm afraid) that the 'three captives' didn't in fact comprise the entire party, and that there was one man still at liberty! Of course the attackers probably had no idea how many people were in there in the first place...
But why is Vanessa going for the pistol instead of Victor's device (or whatever it was the plan called for her to do before the device went off?) Whatever Holmes meant by "Now, Miss Ives!" I'm sure it wasn't "stumble over to pick up the gun you dropped earlier" :-(
"the staccato clatter of gunfire" -- this sounds like automatic weaponry. Makes sense if there's multiple people firing simultaneously, but it's implied that it's just Sir Malcolm with a rifle, not a machine-gun...
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Date: 2019-02-16 05:54 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2019-02-16 07:45 pm (UTC)I went back to check why your original comment (and my response to it) weren't showing. Looks like somehow your first comment was posted in screening mode - which made my response also screened. Anyway, I just unscreened both comments, so they are now showing. : )
And of course, your very helpful feedback was why I did go back and rewrite those scenes in Chapter 13.
Thanks again - really appreciated your reading of my story and your comments!